Identify the thesis statement, and what is one strength and one weakness of it.

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You will peer review 2 research essay. Each review should be at least 100 words.
What is the most significant strength of the essay?
What is the greatest weakness of the essay, and how can it be improved?
Identify the thesis statement, and what is one strength and one weakness of it.
Where does the essay best use cited evidence from secondary sources or from the work of literature to support
the argument of the thesis, and how is the author of the essay using evidence effectively here?
Where does the essay need more concrete, cited evidence from secondary sources or from the work of literature
and why?
What other strengths and weaknesses, especially with in-text citations and the works cited, do you see in the
essay?
For this assignment to be a success, everyone must remember the Golden Rule of peer reviews: Review another
essay as you would want your essay reviewed. In other words, be thorough, specific, kind, and helpful.

“The Story of An Hour” by Kate Choplin is about a young woman named Mrs. Mallard finding out about her husbands death and how she begins to feel. Mrs. Mallard was first overcame with grief and then with a stunning realization. She felt like she was now free. She felt as though she had been trapped her whole life and had no outlet to do what she really wanted to do. Her realization can be broken down in a few different ways. This book was written in 1894 where a vast majority of women were only seen as tools to help their husbands have a simple and easy life. They were not allowed to be free and express themselves how they wanted to. This is what my research paper will be discussing. Some of the questions I am looking to answer would be how did this reality affect their mental health? Does the way they were treated back then have any correlation to the amount of women that were sent to live in asylums? And how many women did not get married as a result of this societal problem? Choplin uses this story to portray how women felt during this time period.
            First and foremost we need to hone in on how exactly women were treated and how they felt about this. Throughout this story we get a sense of freedom from Mrs. Mallard when she says “Free! Body and soul free!”. We can get the feeling from her sentiments that she felt trapped in her relationship. In the article “It’s a mans world” by Ahmetspahić Adisa and Kahrić Dami, the authors detail what life was like during the during the nineteenth century. “It would appear that Louise’s gender dictates her rules of conduct”(Ahmetspahić Adisa and Kahrić 11). In the nineteenth century woman were not valued as equals they were valued in a different way. In the story Louises gender helped dictate her way of life. She thought that there would be nothing else for her if she could not be a wife and do the things that wives do. such as cooking, cleaning and washing clothes ect. She thinks that there is no other way to live. Louise is operating according to the standards set by society during that time. Louise felt as though she was trapped.
                        The way the character Lousie has been portrayed was a perfect. She was shown as a woman in the nineteenth century that was happily married and was living how society wanted her to live. The women in the nineteenth century were not allowed to move through society as men. They were supposed to settle down and get married and live a “happy life” when that’s not the case with all women some women just don’t prioritize marriage the way others do. Some want to get married and have kids others want to do the opposite and truly live a life that is free from the pressures of society and both are fine. Society shouldn’t tell women that they should or should not get married. They should tell them that they are free to do as they please. In the article “tragic elements and discourse-time in the story of an hour” written by Cihan Yazgi. she describes the story of an hour as “a woman’s brief emancipation from the restricting forces of marital roles and gender bias in a much insightful portrayal of epiphany”(Cihan Yazgi 1). This quote was a perfect summery of what exactly goes on in the story. In the nineteenth century women were restricted and stripped from their freedom they did not have the same opportunities that men have. Especially with gender biases. Gender biases around this time were supported by the ideal that men are the only ones in the households to be strong and bring money in and the women were expected to make sure that the kids were ok and there was food for her husband.
            In the story we can assume that as a woman it would have been really scary trying to lead a family. In those days that was almost unheard of. Maybe Choplin is showing us that fear through Mrs. Mallaord. In the article “Feminist and Pessimist Existentialism in Kate Chopin’s “The Story of an Hour”: A Systemic Functional Grammar Analysis” By Bima Iqbal Khadafi. Khadafi makes the observation that “ Kate Chopin’s pessimism is seen as the result of
fear of failure. The result of asserting freedom, as Beauvoir and Sartre suggested, is
not the point of human freedom”. . Mrs. Mallord felt trapped as a result of her fear of failure and that she as though if she went on with a normal life living as a housewife with a husband she wouldn’t be behind or failing in life. If we think about how things were back in the Nineteenth century, we can see how it was scary for women to have their own freedom and any opinions that might be opposite from society. The fear in Mrs. Mallard came from the pressures that the world put on women. The idea that they could not be anything more than a simple house wife and could not think for themselves. You can tell how damaging this was to Mrs. Mallards mental health. She begins to have somewhat of a mental break down. One can make a point to attribute this mental breakdown to fear and how this fear of breaking free from these traditional restricting societal standards eventually caused her to have a meltdown.
            Over time we cans see Mrs. Mallords perspective begin to change. One of the ways Choplin could’ve been highlighting this is the way we begin to call Mrs. mallord by her real name. In the article “Kate Chopin’s Lexical Diagnostic in ‘The Story of an Hour’ (1894)” by Steven Doloff. He suggests that because Mrs. Mallords real name was not mentioned until the “seventeenth of the twenty-three paragraphs”(Doloff, 2014) this signifies a change in her character. “‘Mrs. Mallard’, is given in the story’s first line, this delay in personalizing her identity apart from her husband’s is meant to underscore the narrative’s generally perceived theme”(Doloff 2014). This suggestion that Doloff makes would make sense. After the we begin to refer to Mrs. Mallord as Louise we begin to see how she truly feels about being in this marriage with her husband. We see a drastic difference from the beginning of the story to this point. In the beginning she saw her husbands death as a burden then over the course of the story we begin to see how her perspective changes from her husbands death causing her distress to beginning to feel freedom.
            Louise has been through a lot and the many instances where she was neglected her right to freedom shows how society in the nineteenth century treated women and how hard they truly had it. Through out most of the articles one common theme was apparent which was the unfortunate reality of how this society affected women’s mental health and how many women were being mistreated as a result of the way society treated them. Many of them who came to the same realization that Mrs. Mallord had went though had to suffer way more than Mrs. Mallord. A lot of women had to experience being told that they were mentally insane and that they needed to enter a mental asylum as a result of them just thinking different. Many of these women in these asylums where severely mistreated and subjects to inhumane treatments by doctors.