why people should get vaccinated

https://libguides.astate.edu/papers/introparagraph Read the following on introductory paragraphs. Then, read the following introductory paragraph, and say what is wrong with it.

In my essay, I will be talking about why people should get vaccinated. It is so important to get vaccinated. 75% of Americans have received the Covid vaccine, and that is good, but if we can get to 100% that would be even better. A vaccine is not dangerous like some people think. Reactions are scarce, and those that have occurred have been quickly remedied by a medical professional. There have been 21 cases of anyphylaxis from the vaccine, and, as said previously, all were quickly taken care of by a shot, or other medical treatment. That is 11.1 out of every one million people. Close to 350 thousand have died from Covid. When you think about all the vaccines we have gotten since we were kids, many of us, including our grandparents, vaccines that have kept us safe from all kinds of illnesses like polio.